I remember the electricity
when our hands first touched
the newness
the excitement
the taste of the forbidden.
It was a breaking of tension
the end of a game
and the beginning of so much more
As our lips touched
tasting each other
first softly
then firmly
then openly
we watched our inhibitions float away
turning unthinkable thoughts
into heavenly deeds
as our willpower collapsed
in the wind a quivering breath
But as we fade from mortal souls
and slip into a torrent of passion and desire
let's not fool ourselves about forever
nor pretend this is something grand
Let's be in love for one night
so we can watch it fade
when the morning comes
Let's live a lifetime
in these moonlight hours
and never look back in the dawn
Because we both have lives to lead
and our own trails to blaze
and even though tonight we burn for each other
our fire will smolder and die
under the weight of the morning dew
And then we can spend the rest of our lives
forgetting about this night
the night we gave in to an electric touch
and caressed away our deepest desires
You have such a way to put so gracefully the thoughts of, I am sure so many
i agree with nancy
i've really enjoyed reading your work
I agree with Nancy too. 🙂
Raven, your poems are amazing. I've been a fan for a long time. I've read all of your poems and I have to say this is one of my favorites. Your words stand true and your thoughts, (to me) are really intense. I can relate to so many of your wonderful poems. You inspire me in so many ways on so many different levels. I love your work. Keep it up.-Sarah
Beautiful.. I loved this one :D..
I love your entire site Raven, although i don't know you personally most who read your poems can relate so in a way we all know each other which is quite awesome your poems keep people from everywhere connected and i just want to say thank you for this i love your new poem as well.
i loved this poem, it was making you think that they were in love and had been for a long time but then you find they were just one-night stands, i love it.
I love how deep this poem is. It doesent lie and speak of being together for eternity, it only speaks of one night and noone could've written it better.
-Tina
I really like the poem and the way you phrased certain things, it was a very good poem. I am speechless as to how I really think of the poem. I can't put it into words.
~Ivy
Wow, I really loved this one! It is so descriptive! It's got so much emotion and feeling, especially imagery. In some ways, I can relate to it, though not to all of it. It's really a wonderful poem, as all of yours are. Please keep up the great work, becauase I love to read your poems. They are awesome!!! I LOVE YOUR WORK!!!!! ^.^
Jess
wow. i dont even know how to explain how i feel about this poem. wow. seriously i love all of your riding i love em all! i print sum out n put em in a scrap book i have or on binders for school omg i put em everywhere n im plannin on goin and getting your book too. but htis one. it felt so i donno like you wrote it for me, as if you were able to explain a night ive had in the past. so likme i said before. wow.
wonderful! I'm printing it off and showing everyone!
i love it!!!
I usually love all your work but this one is just too depressing and I hate it! Sorry!
Raven I love it not depressing what so ever
I love it! It had me thinking about my own life and my own loves and how I felt or still feel about them
Raven,it is a wonderfully deep poem that makes me wish and wonder could that happen to me, will that happen to me, and it also makes me think about you, the author, if this has happened to you or will. Its a beautiful piece of literature and i hope you write more.
THis poem was amazing. I am in a serious relationship right now and it kind of started like your poem. I am just hoping that our flame doesn't burn out. Great work. Your writing seems to keep getting better and better. I cannot wait until your next poem is posted.
Blessed Be,
Aimee
excellent words in that one, Raven
none one else could have told the truth about "not forever" without getting the traditional bad feedback
It is definitlay a "eletric" poem. that is what is the most wonderful thing in the world is when you touch your partner in there souls where the energy is one.
i agree with nancy… i have just started reading your work and it is some of the nicest writting i have ever read.
raven i have been reading your stories and poems for about 10-12 months now i love everyone of them and feel you on everything i feel you sometimes more then the music i listen to and that is a great achevment and for that i thank you
Raven-
Though I am only 15 years of age and in the eyes of most just a emo teenager that hates their parents I wanted to let you know how much I greatly appreciate your work. I have been reading your work as long as I can remember and can't say that I dislike any one of them. I enjoy writing and find your work very motivating. To me you are a literary genius and I'm sure to anyone else that reads your work and has half a brain feels the same. Well I have wasted your time enough. Thank you.
Ashley
Raven
Truly you have an amazing way of reaching people. The poems you write tie into my life (as well as others I'm sure)so perfectly. The way you word things is incredible. I always look to this website and particularly this section whenever I'm feeling depressed, or rejected or whatever. Thank you so much.
Raven
I love your work. You truly are a genius. I read your poems whenever I feel I need someone or something to relate to in life. You write in a way that most people could never pull off. I appreciate your work so much. Ive been reading your poems for a long time and I enjoy everyone of them. I hope that you get the respect you deserve in life.
Cassie
i enjoy reading your poetry deeply.. also, this poem reminds me of the night when i met my ex boyfriend.. -sigh- i love him dearly but it's faded. i'll probably read a poem of yours that will remind me of him. anyway, excellent job.
i have never been to this site before, i only found out about it today, your poem was the first one i read and it touched me deeply, it really made me think about my life and my past loves. allthough im only 15 years old i have experienced alot in life and i am always writing my own poetry, yours is very inspiring. keep up the good work. Sarah
wow… this poem is amazing. i ahve only read a few as i have only just found this site but i have loved every poem and i am sure i will love all the rest. I will probably buy ur book soon because the poems r so amazing and i can read them anytime.
Wow..Your words are beautiful..I've read all your poems and am dying to have your book. I love poetry, Sometimes writing a poem is the only thing that keeps me sane, other times, reading poetry is the only thing that keeps me from killing myself, I've had some heavy issues, and your poetry describes so many of them.. Thanks,I hope to one day be half the poet you are,
Felony Rodreguiz, 14yrs. old
I was told about your poetry by a friend and every since i have been hooked and i must say this is one of my personal favorites. Thanks for allowing us to read the thoughts from you beautiful mind. From the bottom of my heart i thank you
that's really kewl. then again, i love all of your poems! keep writing!
one of my favorites, beautiful and so real, reading it made me relive the first time i was with a girl.
Your words touched me. It makes me remember a flame that I never had the courage to embrace. You have a beautiful skill with words
oh, wow!!! this is THE most amazing poem i've ever read (besides that of Edgar Allen Poe(my favorite poet))…It reminds me of my friend Truble (thats his nickname) we had a thig for a while and then we dont hang out much any more….o well…..i really really hope to read more of your poems..i'm a writer myself but alot of my stuf is very dark and it is the only thing that lets me express myself and the only thing that keeps my from killing myself.. most of my work scares most who read it like my mom and friends cuz my friends rn't like me..ne way thank you for enlightening me with all your great…no…awsome work and i hope to get your book…..
brittney, 13 years-old
thanks again!!
Woah, Raven this is a beautiful poem, your way with words and putting things is absoulutily enchanting. You are my inspiration.
Heaven
Wow I like your poems.I wrote one down to share with my friends but I did put your site down right under the title so they know where it came from and I tell all my friends who are into poetry about your site. I remember when I first came to your site I LOVED IT. and as with you my favorite poet is EAP,especially "Dream within A dream". Keep up the good work.its really awsome and i enjoy reading all your works.
wow you are so good..how did u get to be so good at being a poet im so into poems your are soo good
This is really awesome. I have experienced this, I never thought I would see it put into such elegant words.
again, this is an excellant piece of poetry and i honor your skill. it is something that is truly unique. keep writing…
wow, this poem perfectly describes the true 'Electric Touch' when you know you wont be in love forever, its just extreme lust. it makes it even better that it is put into such a great freeverse poem
Hot. Intense. Not like your other stuff, but good none the less. -Jade
very touching and deep. lots of emotion. well done.
WOW THATS FREKEN sweet i luv your poeatry i think its cool that im only 13 and i can wright stuff just like that but i dont think of my self to highly but all ur stuff iz good
=] ***kiss kiss ***
Your poem relates alot to one of my ex-best friends who wants to go back out with this guy who's name is Nick. But he doesn't like her and she is mad at me because we like each other, but aren't going out. Anyway she is obssed with him and wants him to fall in love with her for a least a night when they are all alone.
Great poem.
~Want2Kill~
It sort of describes the way I felt the first time I met/kissed/fell in love with my FuckToy. Truly a touching poem. SUPERB.
Your poetry is helping me get through a lot of tough times. Right now things are not seeming to go my way with people who are close to me, and some of them they are. I really can relate to all of your poetry.
~Dark_Angel~
incredible
That is absolutely amazing. It reminds me of how much I want to be in love.
Do I know you ??????? Smiles ~ Thank you for the email to this Poem … Very nice !
Jess
whoever your girlfreind is shes really lucky.i love your poem.
-karrah