Standing alone under an evening sky
watching the world spin around me
I see the faces of lost souls
dancing in the winds of change
and pouring through the sands of time
No one sees me standing there
Turning away when I don't dance to the beat
or march to the drums of a thousand fools
They pretend I'm not there
whispering about me as if I couldn't hear
just a piece of broken furniture
a part of the scenery
simply waiting to be thrown away
But there I stand
all alone to tomorrow
quietly challenging the song around me
by refusing to sing along
Instead watching as empty hearts walk along
looking past the invisible child
just standing there
waiting for the rain
And it's there I'll stand in a thousand years
long after the dance has carried the fools away
even after my body has given in to the grip of time
my place will remain unchanged
For I am the outcast
the one who refused the dance of a thousand fools
forced to suffer the wind and the rain
and stand transparent to the world around me
But the only one to remain
when the music stops and time marches on
grinding the dancers into dust
and scattering their memory to the winds of change
Though I'm left to an empty world
you'll never see sorrow in my eyes
I'll raise my glass with the other invisible souls
as we watch the last grains in hourglass of time
trickle through to the bottom
winding down the universe
letting us know our work is done
and that the ageless can now age no more
I dont know what your talking about hun, i love it…
oh yeah, first view first post *cheers*
You wrote what I heard
Hey! It's a lil confusing but all together it's a really great poem. Keep it up. Later!
I love poems that actually make you really feel something. Some kind of emotion from it that doesn't even have anything to do with the reader, just with the poem. This was so well written, as is all the things I've read by you so far. This made me feel remarkably sad… whether that was intended or not, I don't know. I refuse to conform to suit 'their' needs whether or not it means i have to stand alone. And so, it appears, do you.
I hardly need to tell you to keep it up.
And I'll be there to raise a glass with you when those last few grains of time fall.
As always, I'm impressed with your work.
an artistic masterpiece
This poem I can relate to the most. This is one of my favourite ones.
like i think raven's rants r cool, like i like gothic poetry, methophisical poetry, u get the idea, metophors, figurative words, say so much more than saying everything they way it is, it makes u think about shit???
Cheerio Raven…
I shall raise a glass with you.
Hey that was really good. It kinda shows someone's (maybe yours) emotions, but i enjoyed it so much!!
~Keep up the excellent work, Raven!!!
Hey, your poetry, to me, seems to relate to me more and more. I love it.
Wow
Being outcast is one of these things you cant describe the feeling of it its turmoil heart wrenching, scary, full of denial and repressed aggression yet you touched on these feelings and wandered into the world of the outcast to deliver another amazing poem. Wow, keep it up!
Hi Raven, things have been pretty busy. I have a job now and even less time since I am in 2 film classes + a screenwriting class. I was able to get away to read this poem though. It didn't grip me very tightly but the way you described an outcast is very new and original in my opinion. I haven't seen it spelt out this way before and I like it regardless.
love the poemm i can relate bcuz i am an otcast.
Hey man that is a good poem and describes how I am sure alot of people feel alot of the time. I am one who has watched the world turn its back. It is easier for them to ignore what they dont have to look at.
I couldn't have said it any better myself. I've written poetry of alienation throughout my life. I believe in Darwinism and the beatings we take that we survive will cause us to be there to raise our glasses when the apocolypse comes.
Don't pay mind to my rants if they don't suit you. Thanks for some hope.
They pretend I'm not there
whispering about me as if I couldn't hear
if memory serves me well, it's a line for one of your rant. This poem have a powerful voice.
I really must say this may be one of my favorite's. The line "But the only one to remain
when the music stops. . ." I love this line very much and the last stanza as well. I love the way you worded things together. I only wish people could see the power of words that you have displayed more than once, so beautifully as I as the readers here do. You are a gift to the art of poetry.
As I was reading the comments, I noticed that there's nothing I can say that hasn't been said yet… So, I'll just say that it's another beautifully written poem. I can't wait for the next…
this has a feeling of the super man..[nietzsche] it doesnt seem so sad, as objective and observing. the last stanza, is well done. i have yet to read one i dont like.
love is the law, love under will.
*arcana
OMG This poem is good. I wish I could write like that! It's soooo awesome. I mean they way you've managed to hide the cliches amongst the cliches so that it ends up as a giant cliche… BRILLIANT.
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that had to be one of the best poems i have ever read. you realy have tallent! i write but i could never write something that good. it was art!
well this one is nice but i have seen better of your works. & your right this one is a tad different from what your usual thing.
Reminded me bit of a rant, however the thought very much so said.
I like this itโs just so true of history
Some people will be remembered and others will fade away but if I may ask will YOU be remembored? and, Will you hold your place in time? I no that I will not…………. And become sad with the memory of lost loves that if not 4 me would have faded away long ago.
Ravensrants poems are totally cool.
Dark and different.
But Awesome.
You right good pomes raven. Devils Child
Dark blissings
Thats a very awsome poem. Alot of people feel that way, and alot of people think others are.Its really kewl. Im glad you share ur writing with us.
nice poem. its so true
I like this poem. I have seen better of you, Raven, but this is… vaguely different, yet the same. Whatever. In any case, I shall raise my glass and laugh when the music stops. I am an
"invisible soul" as you say…
Darkest Blessings,
Ophelia
i loved ur poem….it speaks the truth… let me know when the fools stop dancing
peace:
jemral
wow…this is a really great poem. i love your work and i check the site regularly to see if you have updated. i hope that some day i will be able to write like you. keep up the good work!
Kelly
Loving it, loving it!
I like the sight, now we can see that each person has a deep and more emotional side to them, not just day to day living!!!We have so much more to discover!
my friend told me to come to this site, it's okay and all…but i have yet to find a poem that's truly from your heart.
…I have been here for sometime and have read many things over a few years, but I figured maybe I should speak up and alert others to my presence. This way they may have a choice on wether is matters or not, yet this aside and through life itself your viewpoint is in its own way outspoken and I know this will never be taken away but in and out of all things I must thank you for your words and the decisions you made and with those I have made choices of my own so I won't assume anything nor judge your work. In fact I will leave with a simple smile and blessings that things may go well…I only hope the same for the rest of you ๐
"Though I walk through the valley of Darkness I shall fear no evil…."
"My soul is touched by what you have written, it describes an unfortunate death to the spirit of youth."
"Happiness lies so far away, lonelness a foot, madness right next door, and fear in front of you…"
Darkest Blessings…
that is a very deep poem..i can totally relate to it…i love the poem….XxJadexX
This is one of the most beautiful poems i have ever read.
this poetry really speaks to me. its deep and i love it. shows that people do kno about us invisible souls.
pure awesome no doubts
its okay and i realy do like it
its ok
killer poem! and so so true! it kinda reminds me of highschool! i was one of those people no one noticed at least not until they needed a new rumor!
this poem rocks like a dark ship over a black sea
I love the poem I can relate to it alot! keep up the good work.
Very thoughtful. You did a very nice job.
i love it. is this really how you fell. your not aone. i fell like i am the only one out there that fells that way.
Scurrying off to please and impress people who will never matter, wasting their lives trying to be someone they aren't, a someone who is just like everyone else because Goddess forbid if they don't fit perfectly into the cookie-cutter world we all live in. To those of us who march to the beat of our own drum, and dance to our own song, this poem is for you. Raven, you did a wonderful job.
I often stop in the middle of the mist of society wondering what they think they are. A fake misty glass cloned for my amusement . My amusement because as they laugh at me I'm laughing at them . They believe they are the better of the two kinds of people in this world . The ones who go by what others beleive is beaty,what others beleive is art, and what others believe is the right way to do anything . Then their are the ones who refuse to go into the stream going off the water fall, the ones who refuse to give into what society beleives is what we all should be . This poem captures a new light . I like it . It opens my mind to other worlds of Truth