I would have told you I love you
if we hadn't been saying goodbye
With the end always a breath away
it never seemed real to me
like vapors disappearing before my eyes
and even though you're gone today
there's a ghost lurking within my mind
I wanted you to know me
to make sense of a heart gone wrong
I wanted you to need me like I needed you
and to wash away the sins of thought and deed
You were too perfect to grasp
and too wonderful to touch
but now that you're gone
all I have are memories fading
and a ghost walking withing my mind
It's only now that you haunt me
on quiet, lonely nights
when the wind carries your name into my ears
leaving me adrift in a sea of regret and remorse
I can't face who I am
much less what I've become
Just a wounded soul living in an broken heart
walking these empty halls
hoping to catch a glimpse
of the ghost stalking within my mind
,… I am rendered speechless YET AGAIN by your work.
Exact thing happened to me over the summer…beautiful.
wow..that's amazing!!! damn i wish my poetry is that good^__^
Wow, that was amazing i love it :D…
ilia
your work is amazing…it causes me speechless..and most of it has happend to me..keep up the great work!
That was so good. I loved it 😀
sweet poem raven… i really enjoyed it
this poem is lovely. great work homie keep it up
this poem is lovely. Keep up the good work and just keep them coming.
I like the beginning two lines the most.
i love this poem you are very good keep up the good work
Great as always, It reminds of people and myself of course. I guess poems do that remind readers of things and that others have been through it. (All sentimental) Love it!!!!
Keep up the amazing work.x
Gr8…..very good stuff!! this keeps me here=)
Perhaps the ghost can be a quiet friend, and not have to fade away.
This is a really beautiful poem. Every word u wrote is true. I love it.
I just wish that i didn't relate 2 it so much.
This is a great poem that describes exactly how I am feeling. Thanks Raven for writing what so many others feel!
There are no words to express the familarity of your poem. It's amazing…in fact, your my inspiration for kicking in my poetic gear and writing more than ever. Thank you for sharing the beauty within yourself…don't stop.
Yours Truly,
Sapphira
Raven, this poem is so beautiful, almost haunting, i Hope you write more
man… I was touched. This poem is so deep. It's so sad. i wanted to cry,but then again it happens and we can go on.
Stylistically better than the last few. More structure, nice repeated (but altered) last line. Try some alliteration or internal rhyme.
Keep going.
enitharmon
WoW. Reminds me of how I felt when I lost my girlfriend for the first time… Sad times… And you're forced to remember the good times… I know… How.. You.. Feel… +just maybe+ We may feel the same way. =\
Exquisite. you really hit on what many of us are thinking. i wonder though if you came up with this in liu of an actual occurence or simply because of the nature of the content; ie. the haunted silence…?
this captures the silence of my lonely heart tonight – breathtaking ;p
this poems reaches out to me more than you know. I feel almost as if it were written for me. It's truly amazing.
hits a very personal level. explains a battle within that has been raging for years.
It's been a long time since i've been here, some memories are just too overwhelming. Anyway, as many have said, and the countless times i have, you are an amazing writer. Once again you have captured my very thoughts as of this second… I don't know what else to say, who can, i'm practically speechless. Anyway, this is one of my favorites, keep writing, your soul is intersting.
I can really relate to this right now. Beautiful poem I love it…
Well, I could go into a long spill on how wonderful this poem is and the emotions it evokes and how I relate… But everyone has pretty much got that covered. So, I'll just sit here, nod and say, "Yeah, what they said." 🙂
wow
oh god you are fantastic. all your poems relate to the consistant flow of emotions in my illusion thats called life. but this one is the best. finding love and losing it.
I must admit..I positivly love it! It's a wonderful poem. I don't know where to post this but I was planning to buy Raven's Rants but I don't happen to know how much it costs…care to tell me? plz?((whoever reads this plz don't kill me. I don't know where else to post this>.<))
I did enjoy this , Being the first poem by you I've read. But one thing I have to say before it escapes me…This doesn't leave much to the imagination. It seems already a little to cut and dry for my tastes. Though everyone has their ways , I suppose. I never just accept something I've read , I question it , I question why it was written , I question because it's one of the only free-wills we have as a people left.
is this hauntingly written and touching? Absolutely. But I guess what I'm trying to say is it doesn't keep your attention…It could have been shortened , Or at the least , More thought filling the text. You answer to many thoughts for me , And to me , That is a let down.
I'm very critical when I read poetry , Me being a poet myself , So I hope you don't mind me saying that a little more work could be done to make this a more solid well-rounded article of poetic shine.
I would love to see this in a more thoughtful and introspective version. But this is JUST an opinion and you could discredit what I say.
Peace goes forth ,
The moth of endothelioma
I know these feelings…you are a wonderful writer.
Raven,
Awesome work! I know you have the most awesomest writing ever! I can relate to over half of your poems. They are so awesome! I love you work! Keep up all the great work! I know you can!
BEAUTIFUL!!!!
IT HITS ME HARD BECAUSE I TOO HAVE FELT THAT SCAR ON MY HEART.
I do really like this poem. Unfortunately I find myself in this kind of situation and it's good t find a way to express those kind of feelings.
Great!
it was really cool but really sad it tottaly rocked!!
All i can say is your wrighting is Beautiful
You are an amazing writer, i loved that poem, keep up the good work, write more!
I couldn't bring myself to review this peice after the first time I read it, simply due to the fact that even though people had been telling me that I'd been allowing myself to be controlled by this, it never really hit home til I read this poem. And because of this poem, I've been able to do that which I could not…get rid of something that was killing me internally. And though you may not be aware of what some of your poetry does for people, I'd like to say thank you.
Kitty
This truly spoke to my own soul . I think i have that same ghost of sorts . perhaps a ghost of lost possibility within my life .
Thanks again Raven and am excited for more of your future works .
SymphonyofDarkness ,
Dark Blessings
i love to write poetry…i just can't ever seem to get it this good!
i love your poetry even though im not a member a still check your poetry out to see whats new i love to write like you do your awsome
Wow that is sooooooooo good. i love that poem. u r a goos writer
You have a way of touching my heart with your poetry. I think this is a situation quite a few of us have been in, and so it does get to us. Thank you for finding the words that i couldn't.
~czerniana
its ironic. this is the first poem i read today, and it is parallel to exactly what i feel in my heart. its been over a year since my ex and i have broken up, but i still felt it just last nite like it was the first time he said goodbye. i love the work you have done, it is comforting to know that somewhere out there someone writes about the same things that i do; that some soul out there shares my heartache.
that is just so real to wat i feel like atm i cried
i was goin to tell my ex bf i loved him but he broke up wiv me n i really do love him
that is a wounderful peom you wrote its how i feel i wish that every day i could tell the person that i have loved for a long time that i do love him,but i had no time to say i love you. we were to stuck up in saying goodbye for me to say i love you. we see eachother every now and then and everytime i do see him i do want to tell him,but can't because it would hurt everything.
This poem makes so much sence. I totally agree!
Very good, I like it allot